red bubbles of solitude
lil ferns of sand and fate
remains of the rain
that swept us past
a hurricane superfly
posted by death at 4:34 PM
Thursday
red bubbles of solitude
lil ferns of sand and fate
remains of the rain
that swept us past
a hurricane superfly
7 Comments:
four lines aint much
but u hav expressed urself pretty much
keep going such
n u'll find urself thought of much..
ha :)
found ur verse quite gud!!!
why r buubles of solitude red??shudnt they be black or grey???
I think you are in need of someone with whom u can share every moment of life.....
Look around honey u'll find one for urself....
y do ppl think dat this has something with unfound or lost love? is that the only reason that could cause pain in this world?
btw... i like the idea of u not using black as ur background... somehow!
Lots of speaking images in this poem...And all speak of a defeat that couldn't be avoided, like fate itself. A defeat leading to maybe destruction and death too.
Great work, Death...
Smitha: i dunno. you tell me
Neetika: thanks for the advice
mirun: hmmm. i am not quite sure
Parvati: thanks
smile happened off :-)
finch: yes perhaps
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